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Peer Response – 1st read-through:
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?
I would let the story teller live, but I would tell them to put more action in the plot.
2. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)
It is some what interesting but it could be better.
3. Think about conflict. Does the story have a natural conflict? Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
There is a lot that could be changed. The plot was kind of dull. It was kind of interesting but mostly dull.
4. Think of characterization—are the characters realistic? Individual? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
You get a good sense of the characters from the dialog and actions of them.
5. Think of word choice, imagery, and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? Do any word choices need changing?
No
6. On the level of "culture"--what do you think this writer is trying to reveal about the culture he/she lives in? Summarize what this story tells/shows about its culture in a sentence or two.
It shows that they might live in a remote area where Christianity is just being spread.
7. Does this revelation of culture possess much insight or show you something unique? Do you get a picture of cultural practices? Of gender roles, love relationships, family roles, habits, religious practices, beliefs, food, social expectations, etc.? Should anything be thrown out? Added?
More of all of the above should be added.
8. What areas of the story need the most improvement?
The revelation of culture.
9. Summarize the theme of the story in a sentence or two. Don't just summarize the story, or say what its topic is--that's not theme. "Theme" is what the story reveals about the topic. So put your theme statement in this sort of pattern: "This story reveals that (topic) is (message about the topic)." Do your best here. You'll show the writer what his/her story DOES say, as opposed to what the writer WANTS it to say.
This story reveals that God is always with you.
10. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.
The story was good because it gave an important message about God.
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